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Queen Louise XVI's afternoon reading was interrupted by the message 'Governess LaPointe requests audience' scrolling across the page of text which hung in space before her.

"Granted," she spoke aloud, waving the texts into the ether.

The comfortable silence was shattered by the staccato barrage of heel on stone as a woman swept through the doors of the Great Hall, past the Imperial Guard, and past the Royal Family; sixteen pairs of twins in dresses and curls sitting at chess boards, or on couches reading or talking quietly.

She covered the length of the room in quick, steady strides, stopping barely a meter from her Queen and dropping to one knee, her eyes downcast. "Your Majesty," her voice dripped of something foul; condescension? contempt?

"Rise," the Queen commanded. "Speak."

The Governess stood, eying the Queen. "Your Majesty, there has been unauthorized access of the library data, of the forbidden tomes." She paused, glancing sideways as Clara and Cloë straightened as one, suddenly interested.

The Queen folded her hands. "And that concerns you how?" Accusation, that was the tone.

"The data in question details the time before the Whyjean Complex, the Time of Men." The Governess straightened. "I believe that you know of these intrusions, that they are made on your command."

The Queen smiled cooly. "And what interest have I in the Time of Men?"

LaPointe smiled, thin lipped and cruel. "You desire a male of your own, not a eunuch but a breeding male. I have proof of your deceit, and when I present my proof to the Council of Creation, they will surely have your throne."

"Fascinating." The Queen gazed about the room; Alice and Alexandra lost in a game, Trinity and Tari napping, Salena and Sami reading together. "Why accuse me here, why not go straight to council?"

The Governess folded her arms. "I'm giving you a chance to confess, to banish yourself quietly."

"And leave you to succeed me? You're very sure of yourself." The Queen drew her finger along an elaborate carved cross set into the arm of her throne. "Would you swear to the Holy Mother on the existence of this proof?"  The Queen released the cross from it's mooring and held it out to the Governess, who grasped it white knuckled as she spoke, eyes locked on the Queen's. "I swear, on the Holy Mother..."

The Queen pulled back on the cross, leaving the Governess holding the thin tapered dagger that had been concealed inside.

"Guards, she's come to kill me!" The Queen yelled, stirring the Imperial Guard to action.

"What? No, no, I didn't..." the Governess stepped back, raising her hands, the shining dagger catching the light as the Guard flanked the Queen, weapons discharging in unison, the woman thrown backwards to the floor.

The Queen raised her hand, and the Guard held fast as she moved to the fallen Governess, kneeled at her side and cupping the dying woman's face in her hands, turned her towards her startled children.

"I don't intend to breed a man," she hissed in her ear. "Look at them, Cloë and Clara, Clarence. Alice and Alexandra, Alexander. Sixteen perfect princesses, sixteen perfect princes. Plumped and primped, curled hair and dresses, hidden in plain sight to one day redefine this matriarchy and restore the monarchy."

She placed a finger on quivering lips, watched the horror in her eyes as life left her.

Rising, she addressed the Guard. "She was stricken with a plague of madness. Cremate her, incinerate her quarters. Let there be no trace of her disease."

Disease, she thought, they were desperate for genetic disorder.
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From Wikipedia: Flash Fiction - 'Flash fiction differs from vignettes in that the works contain the classic story elements: protagonist, conflict, obstacles or complications, and resolution. However, unlike a traditional short story, the limited word length often forces some of these elements to be unwritten, that is, hinted at or implied in the written storyline.'

In the case of 365tomorrows - Flash Fiction is a story of ideally 500 words, and new in the 3rd year a 600 word maximum.

This was another 800 word story whittled down to 600. I'm not sure if the closing is strong enough. I'm not entirely happy with the last line, but I'm not sure what I want it to do, so it's hard to write.

Let me know what you think of this, and what you think its point is. I know what I want it to say, and I'm interested in whether or not I've gotten it across.

Edit: Some minor edits, and I think the closing is stronger, so I'm happier than I was.
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:thumbsup: Great story. Hooked me from the beginning and followed through well.
Thanks very much. It's one I've been rolling around in my head for the past few weeks, and I'm glad it came out ok.

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That is just creepy. I love it though. :)
Thank you, I'm glad you do!

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This is brilliant. Awesome character and so many concepts in such a little work, I am sure that this is the intent of this style of fiction. One of your best.

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Thanks very much, I really appreciate that.

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365Tomorrows - A new piece of short SciFi fiction each day
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dA is for the literary arts, too.
Clöe --> Cloë

Very interesting. Are the princes of the royal family also sterilised? Also,

"I don't intend to breed a man," she hissed in her ear. "Look at them, Clöe and Clara, Clarence. Alice and Alexandra, Alexander. Sixteen perfect princesses, and sixteen perfect princes. Plumped and primped, curled hair and dresses, hidden in plain sight to one day redefine this matriarchy and restore the monarchy.

Where is the end quote? Couldn't guess it from context.

I like this one.

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There is always some madness in love. But there is also some reason in madness ~ Oscar Wilde
Ah - you're right on both counts - thanks. I'd edited that line a few times, and apparently edited the closing quote right out of it.

I'm glad you like it. I'm still fiddling with it, so it will evolve slightly (hopefully for the better) over the next 24 hours. There's something that's still not working for me, but I'm not sure exactly what it is. I don't think the 'cancer' line at the end is clear.

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365Tomorrows - A new piece of short SciFi fiction each day
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dA is for the literary arts, too.
Yes, I meant to ask about that as well. The queen's intentions aren't completely clear by the end.

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There is always some madness in love. But there is also some reason in madness ~ Oscar Wilde

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