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Captain Broahm hadn't been asleep nearly long enough when he was dumped unceremoniously from his bunk onto the floor. Cursing, he'd barely gotten his bearings before the ship righted itself, tossing him backwards into the bulkhead, sending a blinding flash of lightning through his already aching head.

His left eye clouded, and he wiped at the blood that was pooling there from a fresh gash on his forehead.

"Bugger," he grumbled, pulling himself upright with help from the cargo nets lining the sleeping quarters.

Staggering out of the still swaying cabin into the hallway, he climbed the ladder onto the bridge and found the first officer white knuckled at the wheel. Half the instrument lights were out or flickering and several of the windows were missing, broken glass scattered across the console and onto the floor.

"Grady, what the hell was that? You hit something?"

The startled first officer turned and stammered "Plane, I think, hit us. It's out there in the water." He pointed out the battered port side windows into the darkness. In the distance, lights flickered in and out of view as the waves rocked the ship.

"Any plane hit us like that would be in pieces at the bottom of the ocean by now." Broahm shouldered open the door to get a clearer view from the deck. Both hands gripping the railing against the rocking of the ship, he could see clearly another vessel hanging just off their port side. Broahm blinked, and rubbed his eyes. The other vessel appeared to be sitting just above the water, the waves sliding harmlessly beneath its hull.

Broahm shook his head, wiping again at the blood trickling into his eye. Maybe he'd taken more of a bang than he'd realized.

"Must be a life raft," he thought before yelling back into the cabin, "Grady, fetch us a flare and the glasses."

The first officer appeared in the doorway moments later with a flare gun and a pair of binoculars.

"Sir," he said, handing the equipment to the Captain.

Broahm took the gear from him, firing the flare into the night sky and scoping the other craft through the glasses as the pyrotechnic turned nighttime into midday.

The other craft sat still, featureless, long and narrow, hovering just above the water. As Broahm searched its length, he lit upon a figure standing on a platform, partially submerged in the water off the side. It was looking up, watching the flare arc across the sky. Easily as tall as he was, perhaps taller with no visible clothing and a large blunt face split by the thin line of a mouth that wrapped nearly half way around its head. From where its ears should have been stared large unblinking eyes. Running down the side of its neck, ribbon-like slits undulated as waves washed over them, its body slick and glistening in the artificial daylight.

"Grady, get us the bloody hell out of here." Broahm yelled back into the cabin without looking.

He felt warmth tracing its way back down his forehead towards his eye, and absently wiped it away, flinging the fluid into the sea. As the red droplets hit the water, he caught a flurry of movement through the glasses. The creature was looking right at him now, lips peeled back revealing rows upon rows of jagged teeth. Broahm's stomach knotted at the realization that whatever it was, it was smiling.
From Wikipedia: Flash Fiction - 'Flash fiction differs from vignettes in that the works contain the classic story elements: protagonist, conflict, obstacles or complications, and resolution. However, unlike a traditional short story, the limited word length often forces some of these elements to be unwritten, that is, hinted at or implied in the written storyline.'

In the case of 365tomorrows - Flash Fiction is a story of ideally 500 words, and new in the 3rd year a 600 word maximum.

StJoan issued a Lit Command - "Write a piece entitled: fuck you, I'm a space shark". Technically isn't exactly titled that, but it's the underlying message. Consider the command acted upon.
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They're gonna need a bigger boat. Selachimorpha da Spazio by `SRSmith is a wonderful piece of disturbing flash fiction. ( Suggested by Kiresg and Featured by Halatia )

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:iconstjoan:
StJoan Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
SPAAAAAAAAAACE SHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARK! lol congrats on the DD!
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011   Writer
Haha! Thanks!
:-)
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:iconvehemont-protector:
Vehemont-Protector Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Student Writer
Cool read here :)
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Writer
Thanks!
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:iconmichael-dalberti:
michael-dalberti Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
Awesome read!
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2011   Writer
Thank you!
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:iconjakit:
Jakit Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Student General Artist
wow! is there more???
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
It's just a flash, nothing more.
:-)
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:iconcaptainkaspurr:
CaptainKaspurr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the daily deviation! The way you wrote this made it so clear for me to imagine it, like I was really there! The last paragraph was my favorite, a total cliffhanger. :]
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thanks very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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:iconhatty-hime:
Hatty-hime Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Excellent! I love the title.
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thanks - titles are quite often my favourite part!
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hey, Steve - congratulations on the DD!
ain't validation grand? :)
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Feels good!
Thanks!
:-)
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:iconphoenixmemory:
phoenixmemory Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm creeped out already.... *shudders*
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Then my work here is done!
:-)
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:iconzebrazebrazebra:
zebrazebrazebra Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Bwahahaha. I can see the smile, and it is straight out of Finding Nemo, only with much more of an R rating. This is absolutely tops.

Only one nit-pick: ribbon like -> ribbon-like?
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thanks very much!
That probably should be hyphenated. I'll fix that now.
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:iconhiddendelights:
hiddendelights Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
Congratulations on the DD! :heart: Well deserved :heart:
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thank you!
:-)
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:iconskyrere:
skyrere Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
very nice work. :)
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thank you!
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:iconskyrere:
skyrere Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
very welcome. :)
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:iconfllnthblnk:
fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Space sharks at sea? Very interesting indeed.

Caught a typo: From where it's ears should have been -- "it's" should be the possessive "its" instead.
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
Thanks, and you're absolutely right - fixed now!
(I hate it when I do that!)
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:iconladycrimson:
LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010
I can't believe you made "space shark" sound serious :rofl: - now that's talent right there
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010   Writer
Thanks very much! It was on demand (see my notes on the piece re: StJoan's Lit Command), and I couldn't quite bring myself to camp it up.
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:icondannyblue:
DannyBlue Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010  Hobbyist
Awesome story man, if you ever publish anything longer you better let me know!
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010   Writer
Thanks very much! I intend to produce something much longer, and hopefully I'll see it in circulation at some point in the future. When that happens you can be sure I'll make a great deal of noise about it!
:-)
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
Hahaha, oh man! That's amazing that ^StJoan gave you that prompt and you actually made it work. As everyone else said, the last paragraph was incredible. It sort of reminds me of [link] (This is the Introduction, which you have to watch first, but Entry #1 is the one that this reminds me of. It's very well done, just like this.)
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010   Writer
It was a lot of fun. The prompt just got lodged in my head and percolated for a bit, as these things do. That video project looks pretty cool too!

Thanks for the comment and the :+fav:!
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
No problem. I really love when I get a good idea for a story that sits in the back of my head for a few days, and then when I write it the whole process goes very smoothly. This looks like this may have been the way it went for this story. ;)
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010   Writer
That's pretty much it exactly!
:-)
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
minus StJoan's ill conceived title,
this is another of your excellent
teasers, SR. always, i'm left
wanting more.

:)pip
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010   Writer
Thanks! She posted somewhere (Twitter?) that Lit Command, and I couldn't help but write a story about it. Glad you enjoyed it!
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:) more, please...
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010   Writer
:-)
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:icongrungetv:
GrungeTV Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
I somehow get the feeling that Broahm and Grady's ship might not be fast enough to get them out of their little predicament! :noes:

Nice short Steve!
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010   Writer
"We're going to need a bigger boat!"
:-)

Thanks for the comment and :+fav:!
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:icongrungetv:
GrungeTV Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Classic quote! :D

You're welcome!
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:iconbookworm-87:
bookworm-87 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010
i agree with MSpaintdog, the last paragraph is WOW
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010   Writer
Thanks for the comment and :+fav:. I only rewrote the ending a dozen times or so before it felt right. I'm apparently a little obsessive in that regard.
:-)
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:iconbookworm-87:
bookworm-87 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2010
you're welcome.
well we all have our little obsessions:)
but the one you chose was great.
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2010   Writer
:-)
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:iconmspaintdog:
MSpaintdog Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That last paragraph.....Whoa!Niiice.
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:iconsrsmith:
SRSmith Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010   Writer
Thanks very much, I hoped it would have some bite!
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